Wednesday, November 18, 2009

Stream of Consciousness- Irony

It stings my face as I'm walking, walking towards better. Only me, me and my faithful companion . Our life just barely hanging on to the single thread as we trudge, halfheartedly. A roar intrudes my thoughts, landing my feet firmly on the ground, crunching snow underneath, trying, trying to forget the one who left us here. Again I drift to my thoughts, my only escape, and remember the red vehicle arriving just after a black cat crosses my unfortunate path. Again, a blood-curling scream intrudes. My face still stings from snow turned to hail and frozen tears, I manage to turn and see a rock fall onto my companion. Now I'm alone and deserted, and this cold, harsh world.
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12 comments:

  1. Derek JacobsNovember 20, 2009 at 9:42 AM

    Your friend gets crushed to death and you keep walking? What's wrong with you! It didn't seem ironic as it did tragic. If you think about it it's a tragedy.

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  2. KelseyNovember 20, 2009 at 10:13 AM

    I don't keep walking. It says that I turn just as he is crushed, then it goes on to say that I feel alone. I don't keep walikng Derek.

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  3. Ryan HegnaNovember 27, 2009 at 8:10 AM

    Derek you just got burned. This was really well done and it also is really sad.

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  4. CaitlinNovember 28, 2009 at 1:11 PM

    thats really good kelsey very sad too

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  5. AlainaNovember 28, 2009 at 5:44 PM

    That's really sad.. Makes you really feel bad for the characters. Nicely written and the symbolism is great!

    On a random note, I really love black cats. :)

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  6. Claire WagnerNovember 29, 2009 at 10:16 AM

    That was really good. Wait who was you companion, because it better not have been your dog, because he is so sweet and doesn't deserve to die.

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  7. Alyssa MNovember 29, 2009 at 2:46 PM

    Wow. That is really sad. You really did a good job of setting the reader in a scene in this.

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  8. Delaney McCabeNovember 29, 2009 at 6:45 PM

    Well written! This is very sad and scary! What was on your mind when you wrote it?

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  9. KelseyNovember 30, 2009 at 2:57 PM

    My companion was some random friend.
    Nothing was really on my mind, as weird as it sounds, my favorite mode to write is Irony.

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  10. Allison SamuelDecember 2, 2009 at 8:31 PM

    Yeah I felt like I actually might have been there walking next to you! Nice job

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  11. taylorjohnsonFebruary 20, 2010 at 7:25 AM

    This is really good, you did a great job of setting the scene. Nice job :)

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  12. Hannah G.April 15, 2010 at 9:46 AM

    I feel the same way Allison! I could picture everything clearly in my mind. You did a good job! It was also sad, but I suppose that that was what you wanted us to feel. GOOD JOB!

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