Beginning of the morning
The light a gift for all
So soft so strong it is today
A beautiful creation
Another day has come and gone
To leave another morning
Another day for night and sky
A beautiful creation
The day is gone another comes
Alive are plants and trees
Separate are the land and sea
A beautiful creation
Another gift another blessing
Let light guide us in our lives
The darkness hides in fear of light
A beautiful creation
Yet another day is here
The fish swim in the sea
Birds are flying overhead
A beautiful creation
Another day again is here
The last and final gift
A beating heart and love for all
A beautiful creation
The seventh day of rest and peace
So blessed is it now
We sing of praise for the time we have
What a beautiful creation
Beautiful creation Kelsey! :) No seriously though, this is a really good poem. You used a great amount of repetition and each line really drew me into it even more.
ReplyDeleteThis is a finished poem for you. You have developed a style here that works, and one that serves the topic well. It's particularly courageous to tackle such a difficult theme. Well done.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the repetition and it was really cool how you related it to the Christian view of creation, it was really cool.
ReplyDeleteI like the repetition at the end of each stanza. I also liked how you chose a topic not many people would write about. Nice work, I really enjoyed reading your poem!
ReplyDeleteThis poem was really cool. I like how you metaphorically related this to such a broad topic. It gives you a lot to think about. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThe repetition was amazing, the vocabulary sounded very sophisticated, even if it was simple, and the length was just right. This is a really excellent piece. Awesome job! :D
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the repetition, and thought it was a intereting topic to write about. Nice poem
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